oh I cannot believe I forgot to put this-- the landscape at the bottom looks effing AMAZING. it's like...sooo perfect. So visually interesting. I love the focus you have brought to this version. Looks way better. It's like, it's still soft, but there are...more things to look at? If that makes sense? Your brushwork is so fantastic. I'm jealous. -_- I wish I knew how to do this, lol
Oh, this DOES look better! I would add even more stars-- like, really really tiny ones, almost indistinguishable, to help show distance. Let's see... The water, you've done a great job of showing direction. I think the only thing that could make it look better (the water) is if you made the outer edges flatten down some? Does that make sense? probably not...let me think... The ripples work really well until they get to the far out edges, cause the line directions are not flowing. Maybe blend the far right and left edges of the water to be more gradually flattening, and that might fix it. However, I love the texture you have added to the water. And by no means am I an expert...I don't even know how to do whatever it is the heck you did here. Kudos a million to you dear.
As for the top being too busy--and correct me if I'm wrong--but it looks like this lake/body of water is, like, under a giant rock cliff? Almost as though if we were flying overhead in an airplane, we would look down into this huge crater and see a lake? If that's the case, I would make it so the stars only appeared where the hole in the top rock is, instead of letting them appear inside. If none of this is making sense, message me and I will mark up what I'm talking about and send the photo back to you. -_- I probably made 0 sense lol. PS, I did need a link, because when I went to go find your post again, I couldn't find it. Stupid dA message system.
Ah thank you!! Yes, the sides of the water were bugging me, I tried looking up pictures of real water rippling but I couldn't get it quite right...I'll try to fix that a bit when Im putting my portfolio together.
It's actually an underwater cave. The "stars" are actually just glowing drops of water, or light or whatever, not actual stars. hee. silly dA messages :I
Oh my goodness, this is absolutely stunning! I am really not exaggerating when i say my heart skipped a beat, this is (literally) breathtaking, you have used the advice given to you so well!
The only piece of advice I can offer here is maybe the background could use a little but more detail? Unless it is meant to be ominously drawn/painted like that. If that is what the intentions were there, then I say it looks perfect!
Also, the way you redrew/painted the mountains is beautiful! Definitely adds to the composition, keeps ones eyes looking all around. Keep up the good work!
Thank you for your advice thank you so much ahhh!! <333 I admire your ability to actually help me with critiques rather than commenting "Nice. " or something LOL Im so greatful for people that want to help me improve!
Ahhh it's no problem at all really! I have heard from a lot of artists that recieving comments like "cute" and such aren't helpful to them. So I try to be helpful, even if it's only a little, because even a little advice can go a far way and all!
It's not that busy, but composed quiet nicely. Worked out better then the first one (it is good thought ^^'). The water is fine (You took the advice and it helped out well)'and i would say it could have a bit more of a flow-likeness due to the fact it's water, but since it's going up due to the figure in the water, but it's quite perfect, and the shape of the mountains gives a nice frame and helps the viewers look at the painting. I wish i could help you out more with better advice ^^' very beautiful